A man and a woman met in a bar on a rainy afternoon. No, it’s not a joke but a writing challenge. Three different pairs of characters and
situations with this same premise.
1.
She emerged from
the bathroom reinvented. The evidence of
her recent misdemeanor was hidden well enough and she was concealed behind a
new persona, which she must now validate.
She needed an
alibi. Someone must see her here at
this hour so that her tracks were covered but the bar was deserted because of
the weather. Lashing rain and wind was
keeping patrons away, save one brave soul who was shaking himself dry by the
door. She caught his eye and he followed
her to the bar. He arrived abruptly and replaced
the drink in front of her with his department badge. “Avril Harcourt you are under arrest….”
2.
“Here’s to
us.” Thomas raised his glass and smiled
across at his wife of forty years. Sally
was trying to read her husband’s mind
with the long look she gave him in reply. “I love you, Tom.” He reached for her hand but he was looking
over the top of her head. He’s so
distracted tonight, Sally mused. These
past few weeks he’s been very secretive.
“Tom?” She ducked her head and
caught his eye. He looked apologetic
before he said, “Let’s order shall we,”
and hid furtively behind the menu. She
tried to pierce a hole in his shroud by glaring at the back of the wine list
which he had raised between them. Her
concentration faltered and she turned abruptly at a commotion behind her,
“Happy Anniversary Mum”. She was overwhelmed
by hugs and kisses and grandkids and offspring. Tom lowered the menu and grinned
wildly. “Surprise.”
3.
He had been here nearly
two hours. Waiting. She wasn’t coming. They never do. An abrupt text had arrived in her stead. She blamed the weather. He had nowhere else to go so he stayed and
ordered dinner and more drinks.
“This is the last
one,” said a voice above him.
“Yeah, me too. I
am not answering anymore of those dumb lonely hearts ads.”
“No. I mean I
finish in ten minutes. Last order for
drinks.”
He looked up and
into a pair of soft brown pools that drew him in and almost drowned him with
their caresses.
“Coffee.”
“Coffee,” she
repeated.
“What? No. I don’t drink coffee. Your eyes… so brown…” His words hung
unfinished as he returned to the dream which became a reality as she sat
opposite. “Jodi.”
“Sam.” Time froze.
The breakfast
crowd some hours later observed them there silhouetted in the window against
the rising sun.
Very clever Raelene
ReplyDeleteHi Raelene. I like all three stories. Especially two and three. In two, I loved: 'She tried to pierce a hole in his shroud by glaring at the back of the wine list which he had raised between them.' You have shown a clever way with words in these pieces.
ReplyDeleteThanks for posting for RFW.
Denise
Thanks Denise. You have been so encouraging and helpful. Having fun with dialogue exercise for Wednesday.
DeleteDear Raelene,
ReplyDeleteVery nice stories. You are indeed talented...don't stop writing!! Thanks for sharing.
Hello Raelene; nice to meet you. Thanks for participating in RFW for this challenge.
ReplyDeleteI liked all three bar scenes. They were all so intimate, and evocative in their own way. Very distinct.
I have enjoyed my time browsing around your blog. it is an interesting place to be. Thank you.
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